Monday, November 1, 2010

The River

google images

A symphony of underachievers
Where reason dies, emotion thrives.
Vision blinded by a cocktail of moods,
A rhythmically fluctuating voltage,
A road laced in bismuth.
Solider past these meticulously placed
Shards, that tempt bare feet.
Strip away hideous garments
Foundations of myths supposed
Avoid liquid submersion and its torrents
Reemerge blanketed by achievement and its efficacy.

© 2010 Kristen Haskell

14 comments:

Myrna R. said...

Kristen your words are woven like a beautiful blanket. Sad poem though. To me it reflects the absurdity of military "achievement".

Eric Alder said...

Nice anaolgies there.

Jingle said...

wow, hair rising image,
your piece rocks.
Thanks for linking.

Kristen Haskell said...

Thank you for your kind comments. This piece really had nothing to do with the military, it was really about emotional invictus. It was more about using your intelligence of the situation rather than reacting out of raw emotion.

liv2write2day said...

Kristen, very powerful poem and image. I read it as an invitation to rise above the norm. Interesting how we all find something, a message, even if it differs.
Victoria

abthomas said...

Crisply presented, a buffet of images to pick and delight in!

Shashi said...

Dear Kristen

I liked this one too, and the image along with this one is very interesting...


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Vicki Lane said...

Interesting images!

musingbymoonlight.com said...

Lovely poem, Kristen.

I'm responding to your question on Sunday Rally Dispatch by email. Am attending to that now.

JamieDedes

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Kristen, my! The emotions are harmoniously entangled within each other and come out beautifully in verse..

musingbymoonlight.com said...

Regarding your question on NaNo. In addition to responding by email to your question to me on Jingle Poetry, Sunday Rally Dispatch, please note:

Just making a mini-round to let you folks know that I've had a ton of emails with regard to National Novel Writing Month also known as NaNoWriMo and NaNo, which started on November 1. I've spent the night between cat naps responding and have posted a Q & A on line. If people would leave questions in the comments section there, we could all share info. It would be more efficient than emails. I appreciate the interest and wish all participants good luck. Here's the link to the Q & A post.
http://musingbymoonlight.com/2010/11/01/day-one-nanowrimo-or-just-plain-nano/

Also, because of this I am late getting around on Potluck and other visits. I hope to catch up later today and on Wednesday ... assuming I can stay awake. :-)

Kirsten, I did find you on NaNo and linked to you as "buddy." Write on ... :-)

Jamie Dedes

uma.a said...

Powerful poem.Nice

Jingle Poetry said...

Please help giving (belated) birthday wishes to 3 or 4 fellow poets:

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/03/happy-birthday-eric-dom/

Thanks a lot for the support.
Happy November!
Your presence adds light to our space, keep shining!
xxx

Photograph said...

Kristen - This is beautiful, as are the few other poems of yours I have read. I wanted to point you to a new site I just launched, designed for the collaboration of photographers and writers. I would love to have you contribute sometime: www.photographprose.com.

Thanks for the inspiration.

Ally
www.twitter.com/photographprose